tanhai ki jaise kuch barish hui
tanha tab bhi the kuch
ab bhi hai
par tab khalti na thi
life moved on, took me with it
leaving astray my moments
Oh how I wish they were still strewn
so that I could go back and collect them all
mann maan gaya, main maan gayi
ziddi hai kuch tanhai
apna bana liya isne
ke ab isi me bas gaye hum
Bliss remembers sadness
thinks if that was real
The irony is that bliss rues,
it rues the loss of sadness.....
my attempt at poignant poetry :)
inspired by : """''Kaali kaali khaali raaton se
Hone lagi hai dosti
khoya khoya in raahon mein
Ab mera kuch bhi nahi''
That's quite a fine attempt, I say! :)Rains really rub in the loneliness don't they? I agree. And nice interplay of Hindi and English, interesting. :)
ReplyDeletepoignant indeed! :D :D very good attempt.. and please do keep on the same track!
ReplyDeleteWhoa!reminds me of Colonial Cousins ka style! :D Hindi n English ka mix...and so poetic the way you've written it...
ReplyDeleteI love love love the style used... and what poignancy..!One of the best I've read :D <3
waah waah ....changing dimensions of amrita!
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ReplyDeletesomewhat :) thanks
@Matangi Mawley
:) thanks for the encouragement.
@Akansga Agrawal
now that u tell me, it is like colonial cousins ;)
thankee :)
@Saheli
I hope I don't sound like a certain someone!!
naah , naah no puns intended :)
ReplyDeleteI pretty much likes this attempt :)
ReplyDeletenice and it suits u a lot kinda :D