Monday, December 8, 2008

I love...

//* you made my sixteen sweet,
you came closer to my face than most could
you saw through my blemishes
and instead chose to show me the world
our affair grows stronger everyday
at night when i sleep without you , my dreams seem incomplete
you have become my identity, we have become one.

you were my first crush
you eluded me for some years
but I could not resist you and
finally fell in love with you
you made everything so fantastic
now you're gone & i realise I miss you
now that you are gone

I was never allowed to be with you
they said I would have to grow up ,before i could meet you
I waited , you embraced me when the time came
you made me see the ways of people
you lent me a shoulder after a hard day at college
you guide me

they say you are vile
that you've had many flings and
destroyed 'em all
& yet when you let me hold you
i feel blessed

And YOU ?? YOU ?? the one I think about the most,
you belittle me , you anger me , you make me cry
and then like a lost lover you come back
and you cast a spell on me again
are we soul mates ?
I try to ignore you , I make fun of you
And yet it is you who manages to
bring the real smile on my lips.
coz you are the one who
gives me an identity *//

How was it? just realised how like for forever I have heard people crib about things which make our lives easier . I have never found a reason to hate those things , in fact I could have fallen in love with them if they had been humans.

Each of the above paragraphs are dedicated to my specs , maths, bus / metro ,money and finally exams respectively.


Anonymous said...

Wow...simply awesome...
If you had not said those words below, I would have not realized..Initially I thought it was about some guy!! ;)
Reading individually it made me go woww...esp the money one...
and maths your first crush?? No comments!! :D

Tara said...

Wow girl! Tara khush hui! LOL! Seriously man, good stuff! And yes, I agree with Sree, even I thought it was about a guy! Small minded me! Huh! Good work yaar...likhti rahiyo tu! :)

Priya Joyce said...

hey gal i need ur email id..wanna send u an invitation re for blog..and the post am sorry examss season..i promise to cum bakk and read

Mads said...

I LOVED THIS...i thought its some sick guy u fell in love with...who kept cheating on u or something

then after re reading it..i was like stunned

ur amazingly creative..i think this is one of ur best posts...whoa...its awesome... :D
i love maths too :D and miss it now :(
metros rock!! :D

Keshi said...

:) awesome!


Keshi said...

And Im bak!

tnxx for all the encouragement!


peter said...


wat an innovative poem :D
cool idea B-)

Resurgence said...

Gal............ now a poetess.. kewl... pata nahi log poem kaise likh lete hain.... :).... good stuff.. keep it up..... :)

Unknown said...

well said lines:)

Nidz said...

huh?? its wasnt abt ur crush on a gal :O
well sounded so diff whn i ignored the last para.
then i read the last para and again re read ur poem .. i smiled.. phooolish me..

grt wrk..

I'll try 2 be truthful said...

;), heheh not your fault , i meant to confuse u guys.

hail mogambo :D ,thank u

its ok gal read it at your own leisure . best of luck with the for the emali id will explain later.

I'll try 2 be truthful said...

naaah am too practical for that.
maths lovers unite :)

thank u , thank u :) , nice to see you again.

hehhe haina ? chal learnt a nu smiley from u ----> B-)

I'll try 2 be truthful said...

yaar mujhe bhi nahi pata ki poem kaise likhte hai , i mean rhyming to mujhse nahi hota. just penned down something.

dhanyavaad :)

even though I'm all for gay rights , but it certainly wasn't about my crush on a GAL!!!!!!
thanks anyway & my name is amrita ( am a girl )

vanilla sky said...

oooohhhh......such a nice post in exam time :)

now, i scrolled down and read those disclaimers first , so i wasn't left to any wild imaginations!

"at night when i sleep without you , my dreams seem incomplete" ..reminds me of a Mullah Naseeruddin joke! it leaves me in this whole world , who can't write a poem :(

Karthik said...

I Loved this!! Nice poem!! I was thinking "OH anither Girl in the Lines of Love" But the 'Lines' of Love are for Different guy [:P] s wic i realised aftr i read the BOTTOMLINE!! Everyone on poems now!! I need 2 start next!! :P

Amrita said...

tagged u amu

joie de vivre said...

shuruat hi magical wrds se kardi
..beautiful..straight frm a gals heart.

I'll try 2 be truthful said...

ya i know u know me too well to fall for that trap :P ;P.
but u can draw pretty well which is more of an asset thanks to all the ckt diagrams!!!!
amio bhabhini eta poem hoi jabe.

I'll try 2 be truthful said...

hehhe :D

will do it as soon as my exams are over

@ joidevivre
tune pura para na???

Cяystal said...

Even I thought it was about some girl until the last para came..Jeez! =P

Good poem though!

ShantanuDas said...

Hi I tagged you.. lol! What to do?!!!

I was tagged and I could not sadden my new friend.. her rule is I have to tag 6 people!!! Gosh!!! I don't even know 6 people!! Still here goes...seeing that you like to write..

My TAG post is here

I'll try 2 be truthful said...

why god why?

thanx :)

@shantanu das
haha i didn't know you knew me!!

shafeeq sha said...

nice blog.......

write more

ShantanuDas said...

ahhh!! mystery! right? I too did not know I knew you... till I searched my blog to see if I can round up 6 living beings!! and then saw that you visited my blog and also I checked my email and found you were kind enough to reply to my mail when I asked you about Kalyan-Suman's blog ... rbr? my email is something you cannot forget.. I guess lol! So I guess I could take a chance to tag you!! haha!

Well that much is enough know someone... right? what more to know except what you reveal through your thoughts here? haha!! [not that I am averse to knowing people more than what they reveal of themselves~~~~~~~~] :-0)

commited to life said...

nice one
initially i thought its bout a lost love

P.s was just passing by

Unknown said...


Very sweet post indeed!

and brilliantly written!

Wormy said...

Amazing Poem Girl!
Simply sweet... :)

A Benevolent Sultan for Life said...

Hahahahahaha ....hmm ab tera bhi exam mayen achche marks aayenge , pakka ;D .

What I felt like that it was directed to someone rather than somethings . At least I would have done that :).

I'll try 2 be truthful said...

@shafeeq sha

@shantanu das
oo now i rememeber , hmm hmm , . nahi nahi this much info is quite enough for online.

everybody does :)

ji shukriya.

main to tyro hi bolungi, hmmmm next time kisi human ko hi direct karoongi. exams are going ok ok.
but no *chaap* this time .

ShantanuDas said...

Haha! the key word is 'online' ..

Sahi Hai ..


hitch writer said...

Well etched !!1

Matangi Mawley said...

awesome work!!! keep writing!!!

james said...

lol..nice one.I couldn't help control my lips creasing..
keep writing more

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