you came closer to my face than most could
you saw through my blemishes
and instead chose to show me the world
our affair grows stronger everyday
at night when i sleep without you , my dreams seem incomplete
you have become my identity, we have become one.
you were my first crush
you eluded me for some years
but I could not resist you and
finally fell in love with you
you made everything so fantastic
now you're gone & i realise I miss you
now that you are gone
I was never allowed to be with you
they said I would have to grow up ,before i could meet you
I waited , you embraced me when the time came
you made me see the ways of people
you lent me a shoulder after a hard day at college
you guide me
they say you are vile
that you've had many flings and
destroyed 'em all
& yet when you let me hold you
i feel blessed
And YOU ?? YOU ?? the one I think about the most,
you belittle me , you anger me , you make me cry
and then like a lost lover you come back
and you cast a spell on me again
are we soul mates ?
I try to ignore you , I make fun of you
And yet it is you who manages to
bring the real smile on my lips.
coz you are the one who
gives me an identity *//
How was it? just realised how like for forever I have heard people crib about things which make our lives easier . I have never found a reason to hate those things , in fact I could have fallen in love with them if they had been humans.
Each of the above paragraphs are dedicated to my specs , maths, bus / metro ,money and finally exams respectively.
34 comments:
Wow...simply awesome...
If you had not said those words below, I would have not realized..Initially I thought it was about some guy!! ;)
Reading individually it made me go woww...esp the money one...
and maths your first crush?? No comments!! :D
Wow girl! Tara khush hui! LOL! Seriously man, good stuff! And yes, I agree with Sree, even I thought it was about a guy! Small minded me! Huh! Good work yaar...likhti rahiyo tu! :)
hey gal i need ur email id..wanna send u an invitation re for blog..and the post am sorry examss season..i promise to cum bakk and read soon..tc
I LOVED THIS...i thought its some sick guy u fell in love with...who kept cheating on u or something
then after re reading it..i was like stunned
ur amazingly creative..i think this is one of ur best posts...whoa...its awesome... :D
i love maths too :D and miss it now :(
metros rock!! :D
:) awesome!
Keshi.
And Im bak!
tnxx for all the encouragement!
Keshi.
wohaaaaa
wat an innovative poem :D
cool idea B-)
Gal............ now a poetess.. kewl... pata nahi log poem kaise likh lete hain.... :).... good stuff.. keep it up..... :)
well said lines:)
huh?? its wasnt abt ur crush on a gal :O
well sounded so diff whn i ignored the last para.
then i read the last para and again re read ur poem .. i smiled.. phooolish me..
grt wrk..
@sree
;), heheh not your fault , i meant to confuse u guys.
@tara
hail mogambo :D ,thank u
@priya
its ok gal read it at your own leisure . best of luck with the exams.as for the emali id will explain later.
@mads
naaah am too practical for that.
maths lovers unite :)
@keshi
thank u , thank u :) , nice to see you again.
@peter
hehhe haina ? chal learnt a nu smiley from u ----> B-)
@resurgence
yaar mujhe bhi nahi pata ki poem kaise likhte hai , i mean rhyming to mujhse nahi hota. just penned down something.
@crazyheart
dhanyavaad :)
@nidhi
even though I'm all for gay rights , but it certainly wasn't about my crush on a GAL!!!!!!
thanks anyway & my name is amrita ( am a girl )
oooohhhh......such a nice post in exam time :)
now, i scrolled down and read those disclaimers first , so i wasn't left to any wild imaginations!
"at night when i sleep without you , my dreams seem incomplete" ..reminds me of a Mullah Naseeruddin joke!
whoaaa....so it leaves me in this whole world , who can't write a poem :(
I Loved this!! Nice poem!! I was thinking "OH anither Girl in the Lines of Love" But the 'Lines' of Love are for Different guy [:P] s wic i realised aftr i read the BOTTOMLINE!! Everyone on poems now!! I need 2 start next!! :P
tagged u amu
uff
shuruat hi magical wrds se kardi
..beautiful..straight frm a gals heart.
:)
@vanilla
ya i know u know me too well to fall for that trap :P ;P.
but u can draw pretty well which is more of an asset thanks to all the ckt diagrams!!!!
amio bhabhini eta poem hoi jabe.
@kartik
hehhe :D
@amrita
will do it as soon as my exams are over
@ joidevivre
tune pura para na???
thanks:P
Even I thought it was about some girl until the last para came..Jeez! =P
Good poem though!
Hi I tagged you.. lol! What to do?!!!
I was tagged and I could not sadden my new friend.. her rule is I have to tag 6 people!!! Gosh!!! I don't even know 6 people!! Still here goes...seeing that you like to write..
My TAG post is here
@crystal
why god why?
WHY DO U THINK ITS ABOUT A GIRL???
ITS FROM A GIRL'S POINT OF VIEW , BUT NOT ABOUT A CRUSH ON A GIRL, PLEASE DON'T CHANGE MY ORIENTATION *sob sob*
thanx :)
@shantanu das
haha i didn't know you knew me!!
nice blog.......
write more
ahhh!! mystery! right? I too did not know I knew you... till I searched my blog to see if I can round up 6 living beings!! and then saw that you visited my blog and also I checked my email and found you were kind enough to reply to my mail when I asked you about Kalyan-Suman's blog ... rbr? my email is something you cannot forget.. I guess lol! So I guess I could take a chance to tag you!! haha!
Well that much is enough online..to know someone... right? what more to know except what you reveal through your thoughts here? haha!! [not that I am averse to knowing people more than what they reveal of themselves~~~~~~~~] :-0)
hi
nice one
initially i thought its bout a lost love
P.s was just passing by
:)
Very sweet post indeed!
and brilliantly written!
Amazing Poem Girl!
Simply sweet... :)
Hahahahahaha ....hmm ab tera bhi exam mayen achche marks aayenge , pakka ;D .
What I felt like that it was directed to someone rather than somethings . At least I would have done that :).
@shafeeq sha
thankee
@shantanu das
oo now i rememeber , hmm hmm , . nahi nahi this much info is quite enough for online.
@deepshika
everybody does :)
@shwetz
ji shukriya.
@tyro
main to tyro hi bolungi, hmmmm next time kisi human ko hi direct karoongi. exams are going ok ok.
but no *chaap* this time .
Haha! the key word is 'online' ..
Sahi Hai ..
:-0))
Well etched !!1
awesome work!!! keep writing!!!
lol..nice one.I couldn't help control my lips creasing..
keep writing more
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