Sunday, August 22, 2010


tanhai ki jaise kuch barish hui
tanha tab bhi the kuch
ab bhi hai
par tab khalti na thi

life moved on, took me with it
leaving astray my moments
Oh how I wish they were still strewn
so that I could go back and collect them all

mann maan gaya, main maan gayi
ziddi hai kuch tanhai
apna bana liya isne
ke ab isi me bas gaye hum

Bliss remembers sadness
thinks if that was real
The irony is that bliss rues,
it rues the loss of sadness.....

my attempt at poignant poetry :)
inspired by : """''Kaali kaali khaali raaton se
Hone lagi hai dosti
khoya khoya in raahon mein
Ab mera kuch bhi nahi''


Filter Coffee said...

That's quite a fine attempt, I say! :)Rains really rub in the loneliness don't they? I agree. And nice interplay of Hindi and English, interesting. :)

Matangi Mawley said...

poignant indeed! :D :D very good attempt.. and please do keep on the same track!

Akansha Agrawal said...

Whoa!reminds me of Colonial Cousins ka style! :D Hindi n English ka mix...and so poetic the way you've written it...

I love love love the style used... and what poignancy..!One of the best I've read :D <3

vanilla sky said...

waah waah ....changing dimensions of amrita!

I'll try 2 be truthful said...

@Filter Coffee

somewhat :) thanks

@Matangi Mawley
:) thanks for the encouragement.

@Akansga Agrawal
now that u tell me, it is like colonial cousins ;)
thankee :)

I hope I don't sound like a certain someone!!

vanilla sky said...

naah , naah no puns intended :)

Mads said...

I pretty much likes this attempt :)
nice and it suits u a lot kinda :D