Saturday, January 16, 2010

Untitled – Why should all poems be titled?? This poem does not conform to usual standards…!!

Time stops as I stand still,
The world moves around, untouched unharmed.
As If it were always meant to be that way
Things fall into pattern
Everything becomes same
Only, I'm too unobservant.

Lost in thoughts, in dreams
My eyes glaze over
Not taking anything in yet I know there's something there

I mix gold with red to see the effect
It's like painting the sun, only its a reflection in the sea.
I paint the ripples too
My words sound all wrong
They are correct but not right

I twitch a little, nothing changes
Not much unless you count the small moments
which pass by, unless you count the raindrops
ever so effervescent, not much unless you count that fellow blinking away

That feeling takes over, The one where you can see everything clearly
You know that now its so near
So near your reach. it's just beyond that corner
Yet something stops you
What is it? After all this time , it's right there
Reach out, reach out,reach out

It fades away
Blinded by the light, you search for it
It's gone but you don't want to let it go
I don't like this light, its taking the darkness
My darkness away from me.

I want it back
But the light refuses like some insolent child
I wanna slap it hard
but instead it wakes me up

From a slumber
Was there something just there?
The sun shines through,
This time its in the sky
What was that then?
Its still beyond reach

It will come back
Of that I'm sure
Enveloped in darkness it repeats itself.

/*Tagged by Sree*/


John said...

i love it! brilliantly penned ...

paramveer said...

"correct but not right".....nice poem and i m still looking for "correct but not right" un-title!!

u right mysteries!!;)

Mads said...

i really liked it. read it a number of times to understand it though.
really nice. i can only guess why it was written. or maybe its a aewhi creation :P

A Benevolent Sultan for Life said...

wow. speechless .

Amrita~Ams said...

day by day ur posts are getting complicated :|...samaj nahi aayi..

will read it again ;)

Azra Raphael said...

amazing! this is so lovely!

Divya Khanna said...

its so beautifully written!!!

I'll try 2 be truthful said...

@John: thank you :)

@paramveer: do I?

@Mads:guess bata de :P :).

@tyro: :)

I'll try 2 be truthful said...

@Amrita-ams: kya yaar! its about dreams and sleeping!

@Raphael : hehe :) thanku.

@Divya: hiii :) thanx

Nidz said...

nice one..

vanilla sky said...

hmm...profound thoughts are under some spell or what...

Sree said...

Terrific...time definitely stopped!! :)
Thanks for picking it up!! :)

I'll try 2 be truthful said...

@sweet addiction:
Thank You :)

@Vanilla Sky
jadoo nahi ajooba sahi amrita ka karishma :P :D

hehe you're welcome :D

james said...

nicely written. a feeling of desideratum..hope u write more